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FaiLeD aTTeMPT (Words for the least of me)
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 08:37:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Failed remarkably- without any help from you
Severed a nerve- a couple, a few
Captivated an audience- with violence
My ears bleed- in the filtered silence.
Sanction off- my remaining pride
Measure, in cups- the tears I've cried
Memorize- my boring acceptance speech
Take the podium- my opinions I preach.
Visualize- a satisfactory retreat
Bow my head- spineless defeat
Understanding- in the end
Success- a faulted and failing friend.
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2004-03-29 20:37:21]
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Re: FaiLeD aTTeMPT (Words for the least of me)
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 03:24:08 AM AEST
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| Failure should not be in your vocabulary ... you are a resounding success from what I read ... be proud, and hey this is a great poem too :))) Jan |
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Re: FaiLeD aTTeMPT (Words for the least of me)
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by arden on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:03:44 PM AEST
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i thought this was awesome. rather chilling. really great write. i really like it.
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Re: FaiLeD aTTeMPT (Words for the least of me)
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 08:33:43 PM AEST
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hey I thought this was awesome... its really good to see stuff by you again. I loved the rhyme structure it was funky as was the overall outlay of the poem.
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Re: FaiLeD aTTeMPT (Words for the least of me)
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by ShadowDaughter on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 06:45:38 PM AEST
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Wow . . . nice job capturing an emotion/feeling we all go through . . . and I just gotta like the kinda pause within each line-- not sure how to describe it, but I like how it makes the poem flow.
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