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Broken Home
Contributed by
cheech
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Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:57:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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everynight i go to bed
with this pillow pushed down
heavily over my ears,just
to fall asleep peacefully
knowing all the things i do
i hate my life,i hate my dad
ya thats right,i hate you
away from here,i'd be glad
no one knows the things that go on in this broken
home,so many things were hidden
my brothers and i live in a duneon
we feel we should get a gun
if only there was a way out
theres nothing we can do
my father is such a sell-out
ya dad thats you
theres alot i'm gonna hold in
theres alot i'll never tell
theres alot i wanna foreget
theres alot you should know
no one knows the things that go on in this broken
home,so many things were hidden
my brothers and i live in a duneon
we feel we should get a gun
i dream when i can,that days and nights
will get better and these tears of fears
will turn to tears of joy
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Re: Broken Home
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by xoblondiebabix3 on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 10:05:27 PM AEST
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great poem, it could be kind of like a song too.. good job, i can see where your coming from and how your feeling
Keep it up
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Re: Broken Home
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by williamdye on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 10:06:06 PM AEST
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| Great piece. Forget the gun though. I am asumming you are a minor, when you turn 18 you have the whole world at your beckoning. Fathers usually change years after the children move out. Continue writing poetry to get your feeling out, you will feel so much better. Pray for your father, you will be surprised at what will happen. Good Job! |
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Re: Broken Home
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by JadedExistence on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 02:33:20 AM AEST
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Well done, could definitely become a song.
~JadedExistence~ |
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Re: Broken Home
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by booboo on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 05:50:46 PM AEST
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wuts up!good write,i extrememly have a feddish for all ur writes no matter how sad they r,ur close to being the best young poets on this site,i love ur work always,especially this 1,it has alot of emotion,and i hope things get better for u ASAP
ur admirer LOL
booboo |
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Re: Broken Home
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by Stonedraider23 on
Thursday, 9th December 2004 @ 03:15:48 PM AEST
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| good write id go for the gun but id just use on myself but yea thats me good write |
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