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Dark Place
Contributed by
xoblondiebabix3
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Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 10:25:37 PM in AEST
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Im in a dark place
As I look around
I scream for help
No ones there
Its so cold
Im not aware
Of why im here
All I know
Is that im becoming numb
Trapt in a dark cold place
As I can feel tears drop down my face
As my face starts to freeze
My hands start to shake
As I whisper help one last time
Before I die
With frozen tears on the ground
That ive cried
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2004-03-30 22:25:37]
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Re: Dark Place
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 10:56:19 PM AEST
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| Great write! Wonderful job! Keep it coming! |
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Re: Dark Place
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by Juggalette_chick666pk on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 11:12:56 PM AEST
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i liked it alot. It expressed emotion and I could see the place that you described. Great job, i look forward to more! :)
-Victoria-
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Re: Dark Place
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 01:03:24 AM AEST
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| Sad but beautiful, well written. |
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Re: Dark Place
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by JadedExistence on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 02:29:47 AM AEST
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Very vivid. I love it.
~JadedExistence~ |
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Re: Dark Place
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by Alisteal_Rayne on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:40:28 PM AEST
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| This is just....wow! That's all I can say I'm speachless. I love the last part 'With frozen tears on the ground that I've cried' just wow |
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