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stand under the moon light...
Contributed by
saha
on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 04:43:20 PM in AEST
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Stand under the moonlight
On a hill of memories
Face to face with my mystakes
I feel no sorrow
I have never feel alive
At the same time I feel so alone
I wish I could change my life
Alone...
Make another step all alone
So when you're saying that
You don't know how to live
I can say only that
I don't know it as well.
Copyright ©
saha
... [
2004-04-03 16:43:20]
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Re: stand under the moon light...
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by venkat on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 04:52:26 AM AEST
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no problem..we can live..if there is some mon light.
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Re: stand under the moon light...
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by Mihiri on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 11:45:20 AM AEST
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Hmmn, it's rather closed-in and non-interactive, but all the while, it intrigued me sooooooo much! I think it's a good poem for releasing one's thoughts [which can sometimes be complicated!]
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Re: stand under the moon light...
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 08:27:26 AM AEST
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I felt the second stanza was a little awry
"I have never feel alive"
Does this mean "I have never felt so alive" or "I have never felt alive"? This is confusing slightly. Also you spelled mistakes incorrectly in the first . . . apart from those two issues, however, I found this an intriguing and personal write, which used an inspirational setting to imbue the thoughts and emotions conveyed via the third and final stanza.
Interesting poem.
Keep writing.
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