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Rage
Contributed by
pimpluver19
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Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 10:56:12 AM in AEST
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Inside my head there is so much rage
i feel like i should be inside a cage
i just need to let it out
bite my nails, scream and shout
Whats wrong with me
have i gone insane
why am i always
in so much pain
The knife makes
a slit that oozes
too many cuts
and countless bruises
i look in the mirror
who do i see
i see a battered person
no wait, thats me
Life is terrible
so i'll take it soon
jump off a building
and meet my doom
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pimpluver19
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2004-04-05 10:56:12]
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Re: Rage
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by alecfernadez on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 11:01:17 AM AEST
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Hmmm, This a good poem, its well written, but I've seen these kinda poems many a time, and have written hundreds of them. I think if this is your feelings than thats cool, because poetry is self poetry and realization as well as entertainment. Personally I get bored of the cutting poems, but this is still a very good poem. After a while you can only rhyme cerain things wih knife, and it can be daunting and repetative.
Still good poem, and it shows a good amount of feeling and emotion, which you can feel with your real and honest words.
U can read some of my poems if you want, its the same kinda style more or less.
Keep up the gd work!
Peace, mzzl n' respect
(I do speak half a pound of bull*****, dont I!) |
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