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Tempest
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 11:05:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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What bitter phantoms of fury
conceived you, the raging storm?
Your ardent intensity is far
too mighty for mankind
You sweep away whole lands
with a sole stroke of a finger
You reduce us mere mortals to
ants asphyxiating, flailing in water
Beauty in all its horrific splendour
has been awakened
Fall the scathing drops like glass
onto the glacial skin of the dead
Fall the funereal sky that
weeps so selfishly
Fall the pretty lightning
that serenades the thunder
As nature intensifies its massacre...
For the tempest
in its most primal rage
cannot be stopped.
Copyright ©
Avarice_Riot
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2004-04-06 23:05:57]
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Re: Tempest
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 03:02:52 AM AEST
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This was wonderful. I view nature likewise....can be absolutely marvelous, or dreadful and lethal. I really enjoyed your imagery here, and the way you placed your words. Timing was great also......neatly flowing like the storm from the funeral sky to lightning strike to entertain the thunder....
Great Write
I enjoyed this tremendously
love
consue
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Re: Tempest
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 03:39:50 AM AEST
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this was a marvellous write i found it particulary interesting as i'm a thunderstorm junky! i enjoyed the vivid descriptions good work.
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Re: Tempest
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 08:56:02 AM AEST
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Splendid! Just splendid! You are quite talented. I just LOVE thunderstorms, and you have captured all their magnificent, terrible beauty!
Stitch |
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Re: Tempest
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by silent on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 09:36:39 AM AEST
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Almost speechless, what an awesome desciption of natures beautiful fury, just breathtaking.
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Re: Tempest
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by Spike on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 09:54:20 AM AEST
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| My feelings about storms exactly! Lilting, powerful,subtle rhyming- exellent. |
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Re: Tempest
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 02:17:11 AM AEST
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WOW!! What a beautifully written and vivid description of nature's own..... Great work here...Imagery was excellent!!!
Jenni |
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Re: Tempest
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 03:16:22 AM AEST
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| You describe it so well. The imagery was magnificent. :) |
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Re: Tempest
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 10:40:51 AM AEST
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| Ahh the tempest... such a powerful description of a powerful natural force. I had the same experience driving home to Penang recently onthe North-South highway for a TDY detached duty. Whilst there in my family home nearby the seas.. ohh what tempest wreaked upon my stay those days...captures herein your powerful write is the essence perhaps of that experience of that moment how futile we feel in the face of the tempest it fury! reminding us of the power of nature and God's mastery...vivid write indeed! |
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Re: Tempest
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 02:20:28 AM AEST
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Wonderful poem, this one...
Your imagery is so strong, it's almost like a movie. The power of your words seems ready to burst out of them...
Worshipping a forbidden God..it's both chilling and thrilling...
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