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Tinted Magic
Contributed by
Soulless
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Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 07:42:46 PM in AEST
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Passionate warmth escapes their gentle touch
Embracing life itself with room for each other
Their love developing such bloom and lush
They all cant stop but stare and wonder
Which dream will fall beneath the next
Envious onlookers anticipate their falters
Looking down lost and perplexed
At the pool of pity rippling among the altars
Love that sparks inner beauty
Dreams they share of forever romance
Everlasting lust lingering in fantasy
As they continue on there last dance
Yet fairy tales end has stopped abruptly
Contentment of silky wings are broken
Her eyes ocean of lovely depth has grown shallow
Clouds beneath have finally fallen
These hungry eyes watch with subtle smile
Absorbing shattered dreams that lay forgotten
Temptations of a kiss is cast aside
This velvet rose withers rotten
Spell is broken as he leaves her arms of pleading guilt
Empty tears she wept can never bring him back
Enchanting rose he gave has begun to wilt
As her hopeful future fades to black
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Soulless
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by Kie on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 08:09:54 PM AEST
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I am speechless. This in my opinion is a masterpiece!
I was going to quote lines but I would have had to have included every one.
Wow this was a great poem....
((5)) and then some!
Kie
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by Justalady on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 09:23:27 PM AEST
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| Magic weaves itself within your words. Lovely, romantic and sad with a touch of sensual. I like it. Justalady |
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by silent on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 09:55:57 PM AEST
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LOVE IT, how brilliant is this poem ****, there are a few lines that are awesome but the whole write is amazing, really it blew me away completely. Another bookmark,
btw- the picture was a perfect touch, especially the way, well you know what i mean, i can't believe you haven't got more comments, the ending envelops me, sorry i'll shut up.
In love with this write,
Silent |
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 10:32:54 PM AEST
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The only semi-accurate way to describe this poem is beautiful and despite its beauty there was pain and chilling, rather disturbing undertone. This poem was mesmerizing definitely one of the best poems I have read in a while. Your talent is admirable and then some.
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 03:22:10 AM AEST
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| Beautiful poem, so captivating. Truly a magical piece that captures me. The words flow so well. |
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 04:00:21 PM AEST
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you dont normally get me stuck for words! but this is a work of art.
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 07:37:29 PM AEST
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exquisitely enchanting:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Tinted Magic
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:55:26 AM AEST
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I agree. Variety the spice . . . etc.
"Envious onlookers anticipate their falters"
I didn't understand that line. It was a stumbling block over the piece to start with, but you immediately picked it up with this one;
"At the pool of pity rippling among the altars"
. . . and plateau'd on a high after this;
"Contentment of silky wings are broken"
I like the way you worked this out. It shows a certain level of ingenuity and imagination.
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