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True Love
Contributed by
ItsRayningTonite
on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 01:44:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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Let me lay with you
My heart's breath is yours
My tears, my smiles
All betrothed to you
Do you know how you make me feel
To gasp in your company
with every word a chill up my spine
Let my lips linger only a moment
And happiness would reside in my heart
For eternity
Return me not to the depths of shallow desire
Artificial feelings that run on lust
Sweep me into your arms and show me whats real
But what feels like a dream
Take me to the gates of heaven
With just one touch
Bliss overcomes me with only your hands
Kiss me and less us know
True Love
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2004-04-09 01:44:14]
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Re: True Love
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jellybellyprincess on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 06:48:29 PM AEST
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Such an amazing write! I'm very impressed.
Very...... dainty, delicate..... VERY romantic.
Some of the phrases you use are phenomenal--- "My heart's breath in yours" (that's the line that drew me into the poem-- amazing line!) "artificial feelings that run on lust" (true-- lust and love are totally seperate things.)
All in all I think this is a marvelous write. You should be proud of it!
God bless,
Ellen |
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