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Dead Dream
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
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Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 05:18:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Falling into an abyss
Of lies and broken promises
A weakened state of mind
The pieces of my tortured heart
Are scattered and all a mess.
Sullen, head down, dragging
Taking each step cautiously towards the door
Waiting until the ground opens up
And swallows me whole.
Some familiar voice calls my name
And I glance up
Magically like an act of God
The crowded room is now emptied
And there you are, reaching for my hand-
Like you were sent from Heaven
To lift my spirits and mend my heart
And then you disappear.
For that moment I knew what happiness was
A tainted image all scorched on my brain
Of the one I had for a few seconds
The one I let get away.
Copyright ©
strange_lindsey
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2004-04-09 05:18:59]
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Re: Dead Dream
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by deathdrop on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 05:24:50 AM AEST
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i love this one. it's how i feel, though its not what happened to me but i can still relate. keep it up. i like '' a tainted image all scorched in my brain''.
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Re: Dead Dream
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 06:12:30 AM AEST
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I like your work you always manage to write something we all can relate to in one way or another.
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Re: Dead Dream
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 08:49:23 AM AEST
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ahh, yes, how true, some love is but a moment in time... so beautifully you have captured the feelings and emotions, the sense of loss, a masterpiece here lindsey, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Dead Dream
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by fallensilence on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 10:44:56 AM AEST
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| a very strong write. it seems like you definately have your heart on your sleeve with this one. -david |
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Re: Dead Dream
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 07:45:15 AM AEST
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How about when you do everything in your power to keep the one you love, only to have them go away.......
This is more than just a poem; it is embodied emotion, sincere feelings. I share these same feelings, the ones of regret, the pain that one cannot allay.
This is a gem...a diamond amongst coal.
Truly,
-Dan |
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Re: Dead Dream
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 05:24:53 PM AEST
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Such a wistfulness and longing... very well-done. I know it completely.
Blessings.
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Re: Dead Dream
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by mountainhigh on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 03:24:10 AM AEST
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To read the words is to cry the agony, lost and alone, the silence of a phone. Mind in a dream, head in a spin. Yet not alone, with those words and feelings.
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Re: Dead Dream
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by silent on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 03:41:30 AM AEST
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I can relate. 5 stars.... ;(
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Re: Dead Dream
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by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 11th April 2004 @ 05:46:57 PM AEST
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this is so sad.. although excellently written.. i love how it flows..
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Re: Dead Dream
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by arden on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 04:01:19 PM AEST
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so beautiful. i loved the flow. just awesome. keep it up you have a great talent.
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