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Alabama Nights
Contributed by
SmallSaul
on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 10:39:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Night fall came and went
As whispered words were shouted
From the roof of your mouth
Only to get caught on your
Throat as you sat there choking on love
Reaching for air
An impregnated mind
Will give birth to thought
But Im still waiting
To see-a-section (c - section)
I sought to see
Invisible love has become
Transparent with time
Souls eyes seem to give vision to those who are blind
Who now see
Summer winds blow
Uncertain kisses at
Winters chin
Only to awake with
Kisses lips within
If only I could give
You my Tu Lips
I think a new relationship would
Flourish in the sun
I mean come on be honest
With a relationship that never
Started could it ever really be done?
Copyright ©
SmallSaul
... [
2004-04-14 22:39:06]
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Re: Alabama Nights
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 02:07:14 AM AEST
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Wow! I really like the play on words, with the c-section, tu lips, etc. I felt that the poet was trying to portray how he was left feeling vulnerable and sad about a love that never had the chance to "flourish". I liked how he used the seasons and played them as people. Great poem! Very true and from the heart!
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Re: Alabama Nights
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by Ramuel on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 10:42:52 AM AEST
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Cool poem, man. I like your use of language. Good job.
-Ramuel |
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