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Can't you see me?
Contributed by
jonteD
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Friday, 27th September 2002 @ 12:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Can't you see me?
Am I the invisible man?
You just walk straight by me,
Not a flicker of care at all.
Yet you knew me,
Once lovers but now me the fool.
Hand in hand we used to stroll,
My coat protected against the chill,
A snowball fight, as deep the snow,
So our love too.
Have I changed that much?
Did I run out of luck?
Your coldness stabs at my heart.
The loneliness that is now with me,
Yet your lips once kissed me,
Never again will I have that thrill.
Hand in hand we used to stroll,
My coat protected against the chill,
A snowball fight, as deep the snow,
So our love too.
What was the reason?
When was the very moment?
What changed your point of view?
How does one go from a state of love,
To one of couldn't care less,
The walk away for every day.
Hand in hand we used to stroll,
My coat protected against the chill,
A snowball fight, as deep the snow,
So our love too.
People stare at me on the sidewalk,
They see those shallow eyes of mine,
Realise the heartache that tortures,
Heads turn as the many tears stain.
On the very street we once laughed,
Now you freeze my life with bitterness.
Hand found wanting,
Coat buttoned up,
Snow flurries,
Love gone.
Copyright ©
jonteD
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2002-09-27 12:45:00]
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by aernby on
Friday, 27th September 2002 @ 12:53:29 PM AEST
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Lovely poetry -- well written -- nice use of images...
Rotten situation --- been there done that got the scars -- but poetry has made something good out of the wreckage...
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 27th September 2002 @ 02:30:34 PM AEST
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Enjoyed this, Jonte... and I agree with aernby... about something good coming of the sad situation.... best of everything... enjoyed the chat tonight...
Hugs,
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by chatabox on
Saturday, 28th September 2002 @ 04:37:37 AM AEST
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| mm, this was lovely. Unfortunately, we cant make someone feel love if it isnt there. We cant train our hearts to stay in love. |
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by greeneyes on
Saturday, 28th September 2002 @ 10:58:13 AM AEST
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Beautifully written, you just haven't found the right person. Never give up.
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by sandyH on
Friday, 4th October 2002 @ 07:00:00 AM AEST
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This is so beautiful, yet so, so sad.
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by OreO on
Saturday, 26th October 2002 @ 05:12:02 PM AEST
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I as well have been here-done that
Beautiful view of your love for her
Keep em' Coming.
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::. |
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Re: Can't you see me?
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by GreenLady89 on
Friday, 8th August 2003 @ 09:16:06 AM AEST
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| Very nicely done. |
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