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Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
Contributed by
strange_lindsey
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Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:02:05 AM in AEST
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Screwed up perception demented and warped
Sly advantages trace your eyes in the dark
Flat liners, no pulse when you're strapped to a bed
Tracing the images you imagine in your head.
Skinny-dipping into waters mirrored in blue
Tangled in ropes and nooses in a darkened room
Fighting the shadows of beasts on the wall
Hesitate for a minute and forever you fall
Timid terrain sprouting new top of the line
In the trendiest fashions you commit all your crimes
Suck in the polluted brownish burning air
Extrude the brackish remains of dispair.
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:04:57 AM AEST
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Stupid me i put quotes around my authors note and its supposed to say... Inspired by the book "Choke" by Chuck Palahnuik. "I want to be some place between happiness and sadness. You never see fish agonized by wild mood swings. Sponges never have a bad day."
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 02:08:29 AM AEST
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great descriptions with lines like Suck in the polluted brownish burning air and a great title. Good poetry as always
wildej.
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by shelby on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 03:07:19 AM AEST
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words wont describe my feelings on this one another great poem your emotions are so detailed
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:22:53 AM AEST
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Never read the book myself. Is it any better than 'Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas'?
Anyway, I like your rhyme scheme here, as it infects me with a darkness so foul, as it squirms around the images you convey. Like it, Lindsey.
Good job. |
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by arden on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 01:31:30 PM AEST
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i really like this. the use of wording was stunning. well done keep it up youve got alot of talent.
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Re: Barrier of the Concentric Psychosis
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by AspenGlow on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 06:47:43 PM AEST
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| I like to balance on the tight rope, this brings it together. Thanks for sharing. |
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