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Soothing the beast
Contributed by
Matsukaze
on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:15:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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As it is, I travel on My pain is deep, but I'm mentally strong
I struggle to understand Why I have been dealt, the bottom hand
What I look for, what I want Is so simple, so simple And yet, so tough to find What's the problem, was I born blind?
My anger rages, on and on My hate grows, grows so very strong I end up hurting, I end up killing Because I cant Find what I want What should be so simple, even to an ant
Why cant I find it, why must I search This long and painful life, through it I lurch
I look around, I see happiness to be had But for me to take it?....I end up sad
And so I go on searching searching for her The love of my life The woman with the cure
The cure to my rage, and anger I feel All I want is peace and happiness
....And to spend it with her, in my life, so real...
Copyright ©
Matsukaze
... [
2004-04-16 20:15:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Soothing the beast
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ramuel on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:29:46 PM AEST (User
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I like this. It has good flow throughout. Maybe you could rework the third stanza a bit to make it smoother, but overall I really like the style of it. Good work.
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Re: Soothing the beast
(User Rating: 1 ) by Merry on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:31:30 PM AEST (User
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well I hope the beast finds his beauty and they live happily ever after -
merry |
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