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Cacophony
Contributed by
Ramuel
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Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:26:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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What do you want when you read any poem?
Should it sound like those in an ancient tome;
And have flowing patterns of chiming rhymes,
With a constant meter and length of lines?
Would you like lovely lies of love lit eyes
And finds of floral features in her guise?
Or should I stop and break into cacophony?
Add harsh, stiff, piercing terminology,
Talk of darkness, death, your soul being rent;
Heartbreak causing shame and hatred and blame.
And Ill break from my patterns - confuse your expectations
Of this poem by ending in
The wrong places and putting rhymes inside the lines, but not at the ends.
But maybe youd like that, and Id hate pleasing you.
So Ill just keep rhyming by adding shoe.
Go back to my meter of gentle rolls,
That you might recite on your daily strolls;
Or maybe youd ignore on most nights.
But Ill stay here, because thats how I write.
Copyright ©
Ramuel
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2004-04-16 20:26:50]
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Re: Cacophony
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by SmallSaul on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 08:51:06 PM AEST
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| This is the first good poem i have read on this web site |
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Re: Cacophony
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 04:32:09 AM AEST
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SmallSaul's got a lot of good poems ahead of him, methinks. Anyway - what a refreshing write this is! It twists and turns like a writhing snake before my eyes, and repudiates, correlates and instigates all in its entireity. I also appreciate the way you managed to effectively change the mood of the second stanza, with a powerful rhyme, whilst still engaging my attention. This is a very thought-provoking read, for which I am thankful you have posted.
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Re: Cacophony
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 04:38:04 AM AEST
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the flow in this poem is enchanting, the poem itself absolutely beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Cacophony
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by skinsfan on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 11:41:27 PM AEST
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| You have a way with words. I really like this poem. skinsfan |
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