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Sunshine
Contributed by
luckycharm
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Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 11:55:46 AM in AEST
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I realize that now I have to release,
The things that hold me back,
From moving on in life,
I sense that things will not be okay,
For so long,
Sometimes I cry about simple things,
But some people just don't feel,
Where I'm coming from,
I wan't people to look at me,
And not see someone they don't like,
But I wan't them to see,
The nice person I am on the inside and out,
You should never judge a person by the way they act,
Or the way they carry themselves,
People may talk about you behind your back,
But you have to ignore them,
And listen to the pride inside of you,
If there is a will,
There is a way,
To help the person inside of you,
Feel good about themselves,
Don't worry what tomorrow may bring,
Cause you have to live today,
I know I will not let anyone,
Take away what I feel inside,
And I will never let anyone treat me like a fool,
We are god's children and we deserve to,
Be treated with respect,
No matter what religion or race we are,
So if I can make it,
You can make it,
And never doubt what you feel on the inside,
For tomorrow you will see the sunshine
Copyright ©
luckycharm
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2004-04-18 11:55:46]
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Re: Sunshine
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by bernard on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 12:33:32 PM AEST
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Refreshing read. Your poem tells a small taleof not feeling wanted. You are like each and every one of us a very UNIQUE person try to smile in all of your problems.Tomorrow is another day another round in this world's carousel. Keep smiling
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Re: Sunshine
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by Ramuel on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 12:43:56 PM AEST
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Nice poem, I agree about the message of your poem as the other commenter stated it. Not that it matters with this poem, but I just noticed you use commas as end punctuation alot, you might want to look into using other types of punctuation as well. ;)
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Re: Sunshine
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by face-in-the-crowd on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 01:00:45 PM AEST
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| I'M PRINTING THIS ONE OUT!! |
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Re: Sunshine
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by Zexen on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 01:05:15 PM AEST
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Brillant poem, you convey what you are trying to say so well, i can relate to this poem so much and so well. Keep up the wrighting and always aim to improve yourself
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Re: Sunshine
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 01:28:47 PM AEST
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so true and so positive, a fantastic write loved that last line For tomorrow you will see the sunshine.
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Re: Sunshine
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Sunday, 25th April 2004 @ 02:56:13 PM AEST
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Very good write Pam, I love the last line.
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