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Where will it end?
Contributed by
williamdye
on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 03:27:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Where will it end
Perhaps in the hollow valley
Emptiness to grab upon
Slowly mounting my slaughter
I shadow the permanence
Heaving my weight of sorrow
Destiny outspread
You will not slip away
Resting you breathe shallow
My longing for proper demise
Your defeat will only please my dark mind
Where will it end
Perhaps in your hollow valley
Desirable you have become
You have now awoken
Unpleasant you reflect
Silent as a phantom
You scream
Never to be heard
Dry tears will not fall
Stroking life with death
Happiness in your hollow valley
Where will it end
Perhaps in your hollow valley
Dont walk away
Lay and permit my illusion
To approach you
With silence
Dont walk away
I am lost
Guide me to your hollow valley
Where I may die
Copyright ©
williamdye
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2004-04-18 15:27:03]
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Re: Where will it end?
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by neglected1 on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 03:32:09 PM AEST
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excellent write...
i liked how you took the first two lines n' started with it with each stanza..
luck to you
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Re: Where will it end?
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by dead_beauty on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 03:35:38 PM AEST
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| absolute dark elegance...i loved it! makes me want to read lots more from you! :)~ravenghost |
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Re: Where will it end?
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 06:29:47 PM AEST
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| This is your best one yet. Your analogies are fantastic. Please continue to submit. Hugh G. Rection |
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Re: Where will it end?
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by Remy on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 08:50:17 PM AEST
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hum... darkness... and poetry entertwined like jelly... with that other brown stuff... uh... peanut butter! yea! lol, don't ask... good write! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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