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Broken
Contributed by
eternallyloved
on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 04:13:39 PM in AEST
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What do you want from me Oh King,
I give myself fully to you.
Please help me spread my wings,
and only to you be true.
With wonder in worship I sing,
and start my life over new.
To you my broken body I bring,
do with me what you need to do.
Copyright ©
eternallyloved
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2004-04-18 16:13:39]
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Re: Broken
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by Jackee_line on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 04:52:59 PM AEST
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| Well done , you have a nice style |
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Re: Broken
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by AnGeL_M on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 04:56:41 PM AEST
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Another Wonderful Write....Are You Sure You're A Beginner?? Cause You Write So Well....This Is Great I Like It Alot !!!!Keep Em Coming... :-)
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Re: Broken
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 05:36:03 PM AEST
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You write very well.... I have enjoyed all your poems so far. Looking forward to more soon..
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Jenni |
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Re: Broken
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by brookiecookie02 on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 07:33:32 PM AEST
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i luv this poem! it really speaks to me. its nice to have another christain poem writer!! cant wait to see more of ur work!!!
-brooke |
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Re: Broken
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by poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 08:52:07 PM AEST
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| Very nice. your letting KNOW that you are in his hands make you new great write.sandy |
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Re: Broken
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:48:23 PM AEST
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I thought this was quite good especially for a beginner as you say you are, but you asked for help so I will say it should be longer.
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Re: Broken
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by Stitch on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:12:54 PM AEST
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These would make good song lyrics. I keep wanting to put a ? at the end of the first line.
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Re: Broken
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by arden on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 03:50:24 PM AEST
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not bad. im not into god poetry so believe me when i say i like this. great work, look forward to more.
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Re: Broken
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 01:19:24 AM AEST
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Short and sweet...very nice...another one about religion though...
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