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two days falling
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:42:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
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two days falling
she's not calling
wonder if i'm real at all
two days falling
she's not calling
wonder if...
just like always
a promise shattered
like everything
just never mattered
her whipping boy
her stepping stone
her favorite fool
to leave alone
one week falling
she's not calling
wonder if i'm real at all
one week falling
she's not calling
wonder if...
by the phone
i waste my life
waiting for a call
that just won't come
by and by
i waste away
she's moving on
i'm falling apart
each day falling
a little deeper
wonder if i'm real at all
each day crawls by
on broken fingers
wonder how long...
can't go on
not like this
chasing the memory
of a fading kiss
feels like forever
since she left
feels like there's only
one choice left
lifetime falling
that's how it feels
wonder if she'll beg for me
i know it's going
to feel like falling
when she gives her life for me
she didn't seem happy
to see me there
her boyfriend gone
she wouldn't let me in
but that didn't stop me
it's love, don't you see?
and though she screamed
i know she was happy
to finally die for me
with rage, seething
she's not breathing
wonder if i care at all
my fists, beating
her face, bleeding
wonder why i cared at all
nothing special
just another liar
sent to tear my world apart
and i sat wondering
why i loved her so
even as i ate her heart
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Cancer
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Re: two days falling
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by shelby on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:55:11 AM AEST
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intenses raw energy here this is so full of many emotions love want anger all wrapped into one. Well done ( if this is your real feelings I am sorry for your pain)
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Re: two days falling
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by Queen_Dolly on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:33:15 AM AEST
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This is beautiful, I love it! =)
My favourite lines are:
"each day crawls by//on broken fingers"
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Re: two days falling
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:37:33 AM AEST
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This is awesome! A lot of your stuff is just too much for me, lol, but I truly enjoyed this one. Good stuff.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: two days falling
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by jaeann on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:52:43 AM AEST
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| i love the futility of anger here......... |
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Re: two days falling
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 03:57:56 AM AEST
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Morbid, morose, incensed---I had to read this one twice, just so I could take in every last drop of anguish. Truly magnificent work, on all levels.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: two days falling
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by blueheart on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 10:18:00 AM AEST
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| The emotion was brimming from this write. Great poem. |
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Re: two days falling
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by parkman on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 11:50:51 AM AEST
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| full of anger and rage, but yet so beautiful great write and so enjoyable |
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Re: two days falling
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:37:15 PM AEST
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each day crawls by
on broken fingers
This was intense man and I loved those 2 lines this was amazing dark and raw. a beautiful, disturbing poem. Keep it up man.
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Re: two days falling
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:38:16 PM AEST
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I'm not sure why but I've got tears in my eyes.
powerful stuff...thanks for sharing |
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Re: two days falling
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by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 08:26:50 AM AEST
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| powerful, raw, so incredible. the afore mentioned lines i loved too...amazing. |
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