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My broken state of mind
Contributed by
fairy-of-ice
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Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 11:10:12 AM in AEST
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Im crazy, happy, ecstatic, on top of the world.
My bouncing soul like my bouncing feet at the beginning of my trip. To where is my only obsticle...
The wind changes direction. It snatches the smile from my face and Im left bare with only the harsh thoughts of reality to return and ooze through my mind once again
i cry.
From crazy and happy to crying...emotionally, frantically. Its dark and I have no place to go anymore, apart from my world.
But my world is locked and I dont have the key. My key was left behind in the happy early, sunny stages of my journey.
It's just me left now, with my worn feet and broken shoes for a soul.
Im a dead end so dont bother, just leave me alone.
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by amalyna on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 11:30:21 AM AEST
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| very descriptive....and I can totally relate. good work! |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 11:36:31 AM AEST
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i can relate too. this is really good! no, infact its more than good, its fantasic! well expressed.
from deathdrop. |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by MyLastBreath on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 12:43:57 PM AEST
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| Great write. Emotions were displayed well. |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 01:57:22 PM AEST
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o vey, mood swings galore... intruiging thoughts in here, great writing! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by reilt on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 02:04:06 PM AEST
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| oh fantastic...can totally relate...sometimes feel i can't keep track of my emotions from one minute to the next...great write |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 03:10:58 PM AEST
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Hello to you and welcome to YPDC!
This poem displayed numerous amounts of emotion and was so sad at the end.
I loved this line---"It's just me left now, with my worn feet and broken shoes for a soul."
*Sighs*
I wish I had written that!
Kie
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 05:56:44 PM AEST
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| very well written, warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: My broken state of mind
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by Stellar on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 06:59:56 PM AEST
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| Very well written, it shows a lot of originality. I like the part about your world being locked and you don't have the key. |
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