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Cycle
Contributed by
hurretje
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Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:19:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Under silenced greyness
I form circles
Great and small
What I do
Is inside me
What I feel
Is nothing
But a clear perspective
Of what was, is and will be
As green as the grass is
Darkened by the daily veil
I am blue again
As I open my eyes
For a hidden sunrise
As I set my first steps
Hesitating, on the beaten road
My lungs are filled
With fresh air
That opens windows *like the clouds*
To remove the cobwebs
Once again
Goosebumps rise on my skin
Annoying and thrilling
Like popping memories *of the sun*
The day passes
As I sing and grow
In full schwung
That's what I am
I just go
In the zone
With this comfortable flow
I falter
As the golden shine
In my mind
Is quenched
By stealing reality
The path begins to wind
I shiver in rhytmic chill
As I come full circle
Under silenced greyness
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hurretje
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2004-04-22 03:19:02]
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Re: Cycle
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:27:08 AM AEST
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| I like it, there's a lot of truth in here, and the beautiful but dark imagery helps heighten the intensity of the poem as well. |
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Re: Cycle
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by venkat on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 03:47:51 AM AEST
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| absolutely beautiful. venkat |
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Re: Cycle
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:08:42 AM AEST
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Beautifully crafted.
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Re: Cycle
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by bernard on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:11:38 AM AEST
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Hurretje you have written a very good rather philosophical poem. I enjoyed my read. May I ask are you Dutch or from Dutch descent? Your name suggests to me that you are from Holland. Beautiful country that I was priveledged to see many years ago. Thanks for a good read.
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Re: Cycle
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 06:09:51 AM AEST
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Interesting. I love the line about "stealing reality." A very insightful and enjoyable write.
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Re: Cycle
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by Kie on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:26:58 AM AEST
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This was interesting. I found it sad and forlorn yet beautiful with dark images. Very well done.
Kie |
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Re: Cycle
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 04:57:10 PM AEST
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| Hur, this is excellent. It's a sad write though. You write well my friend. *S* Cynthia |
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