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Phantoms
Contributed by
Merry
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Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 07:09:01 AM in AEST
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Thoughts multiply like mushrooms
My head aches from thinking and rethinking
Possibilities abound and then shrivel
Confidence blackened by repeated beatings
Brutal words meant to maim and cripple
Leave me stunned and not quite sure
What to believe or even think
Slim resources dwindle to nothing
Lifelines tossed my way, quickly sink
Where is my white knight? Where can he be?
Heart settles for less and is sorry
For having made that mistake more than once
Now well past the point of caring
Perhaps dreams are the only thing left
Taste the salt air and watch the sea separating
Real from imagined my lover awaits
A woman envisioned as perfectly me
Faultless, with no imperfection
To dampen the ardor he grows in his heart
If only he knew, she does not exist
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Merry
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Re: Phantoms
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 08:04:39 AM AEST
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I once wrote "you don't want the real me, but a fantasy I no longer have," something like that. You have said it better. Another excellent write. Are you tired of me saying that yet? Your style is sublime.
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Re: Phantoms
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 08:09:03 AM AEST
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I agree with Stitch, this is a fantastic write you have here, excellent choice of words:
Lifelines tossed my way, quickly sink
Where is my white knight? Where can he be?
Heart settles for less and is sorry
For having made that mistake more than once
Now well past the point of caring
Perhaps dreams are the only thing left
Taste the salt air and watch the sea separating
I can only say, WOW. |
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Re: Phantoms
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 01:40:46 PM AEST
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| A good sad poem. What greater emotion exists than the noble sadness. |
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Re: Phantoms
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by reilt on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:12:23 PM AEST
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| a wonderfully expressive and beautiful poem...it is amazing |
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Re: Phantoms
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:51:32 PM AEST
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this sounds more sad or dark then romantic poetry, but it works I guess. I love this poem so poetic and well written and I LOVED the following line: 'Confidence blackened by repeated beatings' awesome stuff.
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Re: Phantoms
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 12:59:11 PM AEST
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wow! and wow! brilliant gaille, hugs n' love nessa
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