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Something you do
Contributed by
broken-glass
on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 11:50:03 AM in AEST
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Walking these dead end streets,
bored, lonely picture of the evidence how it 'could' be.
Hair manipulated by the wind, eyes beading towards the person appearing in front of me,
at last, another with the same view as me,
the same level as me.
Reading my eyes like a book, I stand, hoping you like what you read,
can you see beyond the faded smile,
delicate misery...
or must you hurry on?
I would stay,
walk the dead end strets with you.
Pity the others for not seeing life our way,
take you to the stars, further on then Mars,
to the corner of my mind where I've saved a spot for you.
Theres just something that you do that makes me feel like never before,
in your eyes I am fine and I finally belong,
has it been you have been here all along?
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2004-04-27 11:50:03]
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Re: Something you do
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 12:40:46 PM AEST
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| good write! Great write! |
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Re: Something you do
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by Rhei76 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 02:03:25 PM AEST
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| Beautifully writting. It was a strong feeling poem. Nice. |
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Re: Something you do
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by jade_elephant on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 02:29:07 PM AEST
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'lonely picture of the evidence how it 'could' be'
i love this. the way you convey your emotion in your words is amazing, and this piece makes me tingle with meaning. i awe your talent and the subjects of your poetry must be very lucky, wonderful people to make you feel this way, x |
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Re: Something you do
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by dolly_dagger on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 06:01:22 AM AEST
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weirdly similar to 'skulk'. if it puts your mind slightly more at ease, many of us like what we see when we read you. : )
by the way, i agree with jade_elephant...someone's a lucky person to evoke such strong feelings in you
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