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love upon a shelf
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:08:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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for he had lain their love on a shelf
he sat there in the sun all by himself,
she was far away; no more in his arms
but it didn't matter he knew his charms,
there would be another; come a new day
he'd told her what for; come what may,
ignorant of his faults; days looked bright
yet; he had no one to hold him at night,
as he sat in the sunshine; he sent out love
there was no one to catch it; he, empty of,
where once was a future, a hope, a dream
all his plans had floated along life's stream,
what a lonely man; yet he had not a clue
he would figure it all out over some brew,
things that he told her came back each day
a wistful tear in his eye; he blinked away,
love to him was a very complicated matter
he'd taken back promises; love scattered,
for he had lain true love upon a shelf
he sat there in the sun all by himself.
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:17:06 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa this is lovely
and if he was a bad bad man who hurt a lovely lady then her deserves to sit on a rock by himself and if he has anything to say bout that Ill get my stick!!! LOL
Beautiful beautiful
huggers
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:17:49 PM AEST
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poor foolish man - he has no idea what he is missing - when the sun goes down he will regret the choices he made
brilliant write nessa -
hugs
merry
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:22:16 PM AEST
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This is incredibly beautiful and horribly sad . What a sad, sad soul is this man. He could be me......
Very, very well written.
Roses
Larry |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:32:22 PM AEST
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well written wistful
shari
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by xoblondiebabix3 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 09:49:28 PM AEST
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This is very sad..
I enjoyed it very much!
~*xObeaOx*~ |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 10:10:38 PM AEST
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Sad but very beautifull!
Great job, friend.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 10:45:18 PM AEST
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| This was so sad but you wrote it so amazingly. Great poem. And once again thank you for all your comments on my poetry. You inspire me so much and I appreciate all the comments. |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 11:52:29 PM AEST
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Splendid and heartbreaking. Retribution is always hard to handle. We generally get back more pain than we handed out and I feel that is only right.
Your talent is so immense. I am in awe.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 12:30:24 AM AEST
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Perhaps his heart was also lying on a shelf..
Dear Nessa..even though a sad write, it was brilliantly done..its a great read. hugs my dear friend..venkat |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 09:01:38 AM AEST
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This brought tears to my eyes and I really felt for the man in your poem.
I wish everyone could love and be loved. It seems so easy to do yet so hard to find.
BEAUTIFUL Ness...
Kie |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Cynthia on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 10:25:15 AM AEST
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| Nessa, although this is such a sad write, it was a beautiful one. I loved it. Hugs to you. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Bongo on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 01:44:48 PM AEST
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Love is precious, life is short
These two people at least should talk.
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 01:00:13 PM AEST
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| they never think until it it's too late.............you have a beautiful gift ladyfawn.......... |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 12:36:35 AM AEST
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This holds so much pain! But it's beautiful nonetheless. I loved it Nessa. I really think you outdid yourself. And as always the picture is... superb!
Lindsey |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by arden on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 11:33:28 AM AEST
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ok im gonna cry. and i never cry!!
this was soooo sad.. :(
i loved this. written perfectly.
so well done.
Arden |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by nummies on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 05:55:22 PM AEST
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i liked it. there isnt really much else to say.
lets just hope there arent many more like him |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by Archie on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 09:22:36 PM AEST
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| This is very bueatiful and forlorn. Lost love because it is unnoticed. Great poem. |
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Re: love upon a shelf
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 17th February 2015 @ 08:50:19 AM AEST
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Ooh I love this one. Makes me wonder who/what inspired such a write.
It sounds like a lonely existence.
Great job with this poem.
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