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Gun
Contributed by
TokenBad
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Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 07:20:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Gun to my head
All feelings are dead
Starting to pull the trigger
Feeling of being to eager
Wanting to die
A poem to say goodbye
Letting you feel my hatred
Seeing how I have always bled
Sadness creeping in
My world about to end
BOOM!!!
Going to my doom...
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TokenBad
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2004-04-28 19:20:01]
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Re: Gun
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by SuperAsh16 on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 07:26:25 PM AEST
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| i love suicide poems. i wrote one too. your poem is great. keep up the good work. |
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Re: Gun
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 07:26:47 PM AEST
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creepily cool. I don't see the writing of this topic as being a bad thing provided it isn't a reality thing.
If this were mine, I'd switch the last two lines around...for effect! Thinking of the silence following such an act........... |
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Re: Gun
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by blackmarker on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 07:56:59 PM AEST
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Awesome.. well done.
I write suicide poems too.. never written one with a gun before..
I agree, I'd change the last two lines for effect..
Great job! |
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Re: Gun
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by sugar0986 on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 08:56:30 PM AEST
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Great Write! you can feel your emotion in this poem.
~Brittany~ |
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Re: Gun
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by AnGeL_M on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 11:33:15 PM AEST
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I'm Sorry But Ya Know This May Have Been A Short Poem But When I Seen The Word Gun I Should Have Known Not To Read It....Sorry But My Best Friend Shot Her self Not To Long Ago With A Gun And This Brung Back Terrible Memories To Me....I Seen Her Lying Face Down In Her Own Home Blood Everywhere...Don't Get Me Wrong It Was A Nice Write But I Just Got All Emotional While Reading It...
********LoVe**AnGeL*********
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