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MIndful Surge
Contributed by
jaeann
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Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 12:45:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
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My head is splitting open
as the demons rush inside
my sanity feels quite broken
and I can't find a place to hide.
The blinding light of snow
has deviously sauntered in
and it's anyone's guess to know
this is retribution for borrowed sin.
The rocking solace begins its' march
as cool rushes of water may calm
just penance from heaven's golden arch
like some tall and dreamy palm.
Lighting a candle to show the way
just feels like tomorrow is done for
in this hell I no longer can stay
just to tally someone else's score.
Rest never comes .....not in this land
and peace died with the last of them
the hourglass has run out of sand
and clarity was erased from the gem.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2004-04-29 12:45:37]
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by lil_angel on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 12:52:19 PM AEST
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| Wow! Good job! hope you feel better |
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by Brians_Sweety on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 01:01:33 PM AEST
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This is really good. If you can write this well with a headache I am really looking ofrward to what you write when it doesn't hurt to think lol. Good Write. Fell better Soon!
Stephanie |
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by Rhei76 on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 01:36:07 PM AEST
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| Good poem, With great insight upon this gem. God bless you. |
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by venkat on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 04:16:09 AM AEST
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As always emotinal and captivating. indeed it is good surge.."cool rushes of water may calm just penance from heaven's golden arch like some tall and dreamy palm.
Lighting a candle to show the way"... thats wonderful poetry with a nice thought wave..venkat
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 11:50:29 PM AEST
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Oh Jaymee, I didn't know you suffered from Migraines. I used to have them so bad sometimes I fall into a semi-conscience coma. I always liked that time.....I couldn't feel the pain as much.
But guess what, the minute I got my former husband out of my life.......my migraines stopped. So maybe you are right......the demons do enter and play their painful games......Oh how I hope you can find some relief soon. I'd rather take a beating that have another migraine.
This poem really explained them to a "t"
love you
consue |
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by arden on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 09:48:34 PM AEST
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i can really relate to this.
its very well written. wonderful insight.
wonderfully done. i really enjoyed it.
keep it up.
Arden |
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by BlackFire9786 on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 10:15:39 PM AEST
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Wow, ur an amazing poet even when it hurts to think! This poem is awesome, i love the rhyming and metaphors and word choice...it was all perfect! I know how you feel, i get migraines all the time...they suck, lol! Anyways, awesome work, i'll be reading more of your stuff!
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Re: MIndful Surge
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 08:58:01 PM AEST
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| i really like this. it's interesting to see what we can gather from our pain. keep up the great writing. |
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