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When the Tears Won't Flow
Contributed by
Black13
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Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 07:32:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I stumble and falter when nothing seems fine.
Sometimes, I wish and pray, looking for some sign.
When it seems like a million rocks are in your path.
And air seems too thin to let me breath, maybe life's wrath?
Every forced smile feels like a thousand needles in your face;
with every pain cured, hopeless, when ten more take it's place.
No one ever has a hand to lend but looks to your shoulder to cry on.
My world sees dark and gray, when tears won't flow, drawn in crayon.
The bottom, sometimes, seems so far above my head;
and still here I am drowning, when feet are bound by lead.
When it feels like the only thing left is dying,
but you feel to weak to even attempt trying.
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Black13
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by arden on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 07:41:20 PM AEST
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wow... a very powerful poem. a deep meaningful message in it.
your writes just keep getting better and better.
i loved this.
i look forward to more.
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 08:02:24 PM AEST
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Well, your timing is magnificent, thank you. Keep writing and bring the sunshine forth for a while.
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by blueheart on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 06:46:42 AM AEST
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| The whole poem was brimming with emotion. So honest and well worded. I liked it a lot. |
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by Stitch on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 09:16:40 AM AEST
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This is such a strong statement of empathy. You have a good heart, my friend. Thank you.
We are all here to hold each other up, aren't we? There is always a purchase. I especially like the image of the tears drawn in crayon.
Nice work.
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by JennyFruFru on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 11:43:37 AM AEST
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this is very deep and powerful.... i like this line best...
"Sometimes, I wish and pray, looking for some sign."
Cause I do that all the time... but even when you think you are getting some sort of sign its seems like you dont really even know what it is pointing too... :) :) :)
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by reilt on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 05:22:55 PM AEST
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| brilliant stuff...so well written and emotional. a beautiful write |
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 09:06:08 AM AEST
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| A wonderful message behind this poem. Great job expressing your difficulties. |
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by StoneAngel on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 03:02:15 PM AEST
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| wow, great read. |
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Re: When the Tears Won't Flow
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 09:13:37 AM AEST
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Beautiful write
especially:
"No one ever has a hand to lend but looks to your shoulder to cry on.
My world sees dark and gray, when tears won't flow, drawn in crayon."
I know how this feels all too well...
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