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Forever in your embrace
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 01:22:32 PM in AEST
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You hold me close,
Shivering in guilty denial,
Listening as silent whispers betray my emotions,
Caressing my thoughts which drift in and out of shadows...
We watch the stars cry,
Shooting their tears across the heavens,
As they try to shield me from your light,
But I'm slowly being drawn into your eyes...
Beautiful but touched by terror,
I want to stay this way...
...In your arms forever.
You make me feel whole,
Protected by the circle of your arms,
And I know I can rest easy,
As my hero watches over me,
And we can sleep eternal slumber,
Proving love together,
As the stars cry the blackest tears,
Which reflect in the mirrors in your eyes,
Surrounding me with your newly found darkness,
I want to stay this way...
...In your arms forever
As I die in your embrace....
Rest easy...
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by Black13 on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 01:27:05 PM AEST
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Lost I most definetely enjoyed this write.
It was superbly done.
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by afraid_of_fear on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 01:55:48 PM AEST
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what a beautiful poem.. i loved the imagery, particularly of the stars.. amazing..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by wyrd_faerie on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 03:37:08 PM AEST
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| this is such a beautiful, dark poem...such love in your words...wow...amazing... |
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 05:55:25 AM AEST
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Very touching and haunting. Such a comfort in death. I know that feeling. So much joy in life though.
Stitch |
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by arden on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 10:39:39 AM AEST
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oh wow.
this was beyond amazing. the imagery was stunning. i loved your use of words. this was pure greatness.
i loved it!
Arden |
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 10:27:06 AM AEST
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i'd say, yes, dark poetry works fine for this...
yery poetic, wonderful... i love the line 'surrounding me with your newly found darkness'
although, a couple of the lines do contradict, (stanza 1 line 7 and stanza 2 line 9, and stanza 1 line 6, stanza 2 line 7)
i feel this works with the dark glittering, slightly undrlying confusion of this poem...
beautiful... and now I feel King...
(ace, class)
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Re: Forever in your embrace
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 08:06:07 PM AEST
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| deep, the imagery is incredable. wow |
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