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Love Life Scrabble
Contributed by
pumpkinpie
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Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 02:21:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The letters inside her head tangled together
Spell out her every emotion she had hoped obscure
As dreams about him through her body sparkle and glitter
The squares inside her head reveal wishful thinker
Her eyes observe the male opponents' motions
But letters from his gestures reveal absurd directions
Her soul tries to soar onto his hidden board
To acknowledge which words from his heart she can afford
The clock ticks as the game begins to unfold
But the ninety degree angles are filled with void
Her answers cannot be given until his turn is played
Her heart champion she simply cannot evade
And how can she when the game is played in secrecy
The ink on wood invisible,torn to debris
When the bag of letters between them will never be opened
And the board of longings and truth are forever to be held within
???
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by lil_angel on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 03:09:44 PM AEST
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This is a wonderful peice i REALLY loved this lines:
The ink on wood invisible,torn to debris
When the bag of letters between them will never be opened
And the board of longings and truth are forever to be held within
Wonderful job! |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Diatribe on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 03:13:26 PM AEST
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| well done! |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Stitch on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 04:36:25 PM AEST
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Very interesting. Is there a story to this? Some of the word plays are wonderful. (No pun intended.)
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 05:01:13 PM AEST
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Dear Little Pumpkin Pie,
I was married to a man just like this Ppie, And I knew it wasn't love, because Love shouldn't hurt......Love is kind, Love is gracious, Love is fine.,,,,so inorder to deal with him I began to conjure another person up in my mind.......a nother man that truly loved me. Was always kind, and loving, generous, and giving. When I read this poem, it was written so skillfully, Ppie I could place myself back into that same time frame and remember what I had done.
That was the only defense I had against his ugliness......and if this is someone in your life now, drop him like you would a hot potato he hasn't the slightest inkling of what true love is!
love you.....you deserve so much love and kindness, settle for no less!
ever
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 06:27:24 PM AEST
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| ohhh so sad, beautifully written:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 07:18:18 PM AEST
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Thanks Loving,but this is meant for the one I love dearly that doesn't even know about my love for him because of circumstances that cannot permit our love to take place and the pain I feel inside about not being able to tell him everything because of this.
-Pumpkinpie |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 08:49:43 PM AEST
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This is beautifully written but so very sad. I have missed your writes my friend ...more ! more!!
Very well done
Roses
Larry
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by twinkletoes on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 04:52:57 PM AEST
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Go tell the fella I say!
Anyway, good words unselfish devotion, very nice. You don't post fast but they are all great reads.
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 03:28:42 PM AEST
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| Love is sometimes like that, true love when revealed will leave no secrecy and love will grow deep and strong, all other types of "love" leave heart ache and questioning of self and others. I hope true love will be revealed in your life one day. |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 01:28:43 AM AEST
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Great writing and u have captured your subject well.
luv, huggs,
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Overstated on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 05:42:16 AM AEST
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It sounds as if your real opponent is not necessarily the guy in this poem; its circumstances that you know this guy in. The game of scrabble is a great way of you spelling out your feelings - if you chose to or hide the words you long to say and visa versa for him.
What a really good poem and idea. As always you write it so eloquently, so controlled yet uncontrolled.
-hope your situation can sort itself out for you mate...
Rod
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 03:45:07 PM AEST
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| Great write. |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 09:41:01 PM AEST
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| excellent write. very creative and original. very well written, and captivating. very nice verses indeedy, i cant stop reading them. |
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 08:21:37 PM AEST
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Brilliant writing. What an awesome concept: "Love Life Scrabble". Sad write however, still incredible. :)
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Re: Love Life Scrabble
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th October 2009 @ 07:17:32 AM AEST
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creative writing, a different take on unrequited love.
-Phil |
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