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Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
Contributed by
morelikelyrics
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Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 08:30:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Planes above that soar overhead
Wings that sail upon a tranquil blue
Engine sings across a sky widespread
To defy the downfall of gravity.
But exhilarating flights can't adhere to the chilling breeze
Nor sail upon these violent, thrashing seas
When all I see is you...
Automobiles caught in rush-hour traffic
Wheels that roll along the asphalt black
Gears grind to supply the fuel to move
But city limit sights can't disappear among the smog so thick
Nor brake to prevent a death so tragic
When all I hear is you...
Bicycle pedals that spin with force
Handlebars that grip and hold on tight
Bells that chime to alarm those on course
But training wheels can't support this teetering life
Nor accerlerate to elude a painful collision
When all I want is you...
And all of man's ingenious creations
And all of life's inevitable transformations
And all of earth's mechanical transportations
Bring the world that much closer
So easy it is to cross the oceans wide
And so effortless to travel without guide
But a sinking ship can't float upon a smitten surface that's cut in two
Nor carry desperate bodies across water so deep
When none of these,
Can bring me to you...
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 08:49:43 PM AEST
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ohhhh this is beautiful, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 09:26:49 PM AEST
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| Oh wow!!!!! I'm speechless. This was terrific. I applaud you my friend. You write beautifully. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by KittyGurl on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 02:00:18 PM AEST
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You have such meaning in your poems that simply cannot be explained. A select few can write poems with such meaning. Very good write.
-Kittygurl |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by Falloftheangels on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 03:59:07 PM AEST
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oh wow. This is really good. It has such an impact. Especially the last lines
"But a sinking ship can't float upon a smitten surface that's cut in two
Nor carry desperate bodies across water so deep
When none of these,
Can bring me to you..."
Keep writing! You have REAL talent. Its not seen often so dont let it go to waste! |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 10:21:05 PM AEST
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Wow . . . beautiful and as eloquent (well, almost, but I guess I'm biased in LP's favor :) ) as Lonesome Phonebook. A pleasure to read, vivid, and very well depicted. If your other poems are anything like this and Lonesome Phonebook, I'm definitely a fan.
--Nora |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 09:25:27 PM AEST
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Excellent! I love the theme introduced in the note, and the way it plays out in the piece.
Bravo!
Andrew |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by arden on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 10:51:36 PM AEST
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this just has to be one of the greatest poems i have ever read.
i dont know where to begin.
the imagery was just stunningly beautiful. your use of words was simply amazing. so full of emotion and meaning. truely a great and awesome write.
i loved this.
perfectly done. keep it up you have a great talent.
Arden |
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Re: Lovers Across an Ocean so Wide
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 09:52:23 AM AEST
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Impressive write. I appreciate the endeavour involved in writing such a fluid and entertaining work.
Well done. |
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