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To Die
Contributed by
Dorrie
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Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 08:46:30 PM in AEST
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I lied there waiting to die, but then I looked up in the sky and didn't know why.
I sat there wondering what went wrong and thought of you .
Your the one I know who cares and now your gone and I'm really scared.
On that night I thought of you and found out what to do.
I went to sleep and dreamt of things...but not so happy and would make me scream.
At this point in time all I wanna do is die.
So here's the thing and please don't cry.
On this night i wish to die because I found out it was all a lie.
Copyright ©
Dorrie
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2004-05-06 20:46:30]
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Re: To Die
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by Merry on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 08:54:02 PM AEST
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It hurts when someone lies to us - your poem is well written and really conveys that feeling of betrayal
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Re: To Die
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by Soulless on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 09:11:13 PM AEST
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Very depressing but I love the emotion clentched tightly along the strong word choice. It makes all the difference. I also enjoyed the ending twist.
Great job
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: To Die
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 01:42:45 PM AEST
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Well I'm certainly glad you stayed alive, just to write heart wrenching poetry like this. Well done! Keep on living.....it's the hard stuff that makes us stronger along the way.
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: To Die
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 10:12:40 PM AEST
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dorrie,
your poem has so uch truth in it whoever u are talking baout needs to know how you feel and let them know that you feel this way and maybe you should talk to another one like a close freind abut this but the poem is scarry i hope you dont really want to die because i am sure people around u care for u alot |
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Re: To Die
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by bite_me on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 10:27:56 PM AEST
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| hey, very nicely writtin, that's really good.. sad what happens in life though isn't it... :/ |
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Re: To Die
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:25:55 PM AEST
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| Well ya everyone get's mad about thing but is what you said true? |
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