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The Last One Takes The Cake
Contributed by
SuperAsh16
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Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 02:20:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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the wind growls with the compassion of a bear.
the thunder rolls in like a train wreck waiting to happen
the blade slices over my skin with the precision of a surgeon making the first cut into an expectant mothers' stomach.
the first cut is the deepest, but the last one takes the cake.
oops, i ran into a vein.
the pain tastes bittersweet on a rainy day.
the lightening strikes close.
how ironic. so does the knife.
close to death yet so far from internal happiness.
is this really what i want?
oh so sweet revenge on those who laughed when i was but a child?
then again, who really wants to die?
me, i do.
the blade sinks in. the last cut is here.
and the world falls away as i sink into a infinite sleep.
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SuperAsh16
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2004-05-09 02:20:32]
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Re: The Last One Takes The Cake
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by BinkCaesar on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 02:26:38 AM AEST
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Wonderfully thought out, with wording that describes my own life, so i related to it very easily. I enjoyed it as much as i enjoy anything.
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Re: The Last One Takes The Cake
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by surfer_boy_lost on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 02:36:27 AM AEST
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| i can't believe how well you captured the moment. wonderfully written, so depressing yet so enlightening to those who can relate. |
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Re: The Last One Takes The Cake
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by bernard on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 08:31:21 AM AEST
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All I can say to this poem is RIP. If that is really what you want.
bernard. |
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