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Unopened Eyes
Contributed by
MarlissEGeesE
on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 01:17:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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With no warning,
your eyes close
The void becomes never-ending.
A turmoil of despondency
enthralling me eternally
The gates,
sealed
Never knowing
of parallel souls
intertwined in rhapsodic beauty
A splendour,
discovered upon the wonders demise
Repentantly unappreciated,
last minutes, futile
Distorting fog,
abating in the moments,
in the time of concluding despair
Possible ecstasies,
indiscoverable
Oysters,
forever remaining unopened
Stars forget to shimmer,
owing to unasked wishes
You ceased to learn,
to hear of admiration
Captivated perpetually with regret
Knowingly, the eyes
never resurrect
Copyright ©
MarlissEGeesE
... [
2004-05-11 01:17:04]
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Re: Unopened Eyes
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by katyqueen35 on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 01:30:00 AM AEST
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I can really feel your poem ,
well i think it's a nicely written piece.
good job, |
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Re: Unopened Eyes
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by Hurretje on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 05:02:01 AM AEST
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Wonderful, wise and thought-provoking! I like this poem very much and keep them coming!
Greetz,
Hur |
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Re: Unopened Eyes
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by thumper on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 06:24:35 AM AEST
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| You are a very talented writer. Personally, I cannot give you constructive criticism because I think this write is perfect as it is. Keep writing and I will read your posts with relish! ;-) Welcome to your newest addiction lol YPDC! Thumps ; 0 ) |
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