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prosthetic angel
Contributed by
Cancer
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Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 10:51:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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pieces here
and pieces there
built from grave mistakes
so lithe and pale
like a whisper of winter
a secret from the cold
wasteland of skin
stitched and snipped even
dressed in the dozens of birthday suits
she was created from
patches of neglected flesh
have peeled off here and there
but even the sight of molded bone
is like a forbidden glimpse of paradise
those blue lips set
in a curious smile
a dead mona lisa
but a far greater work of art
my prosthetic angel
my patchwork queen
my most beautiful creation
a breathless breath taker
a broken butterfly
the bride i never found among the imperfect
pieces from here
pieces from there
built from open grave mistakes
mysterious and pale
behind the bridal veil
adorned in musty white
like a starless winter night
a secret kiss stolen
from the very depths of hell
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Cancer
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Re: prosthetic angel
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by Voice-of-Revolution on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 12:25:25 AM AEST
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| Perhaps you should reconsider your viewpoint. Is she perfect because you think it should be so, or because of your indoctrinated tendencies? now would be a good time to question who you actually are and what you are actually doing. |
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Re: prosthetic angel
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 06:21:50 AM AEST
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Without taking this too literally, *grins* I'd say that this is an excellently written work, which both evokes revulsion at the imagery, and gentle wonder at the ideas and emotion that lies behind it.
5 stars. |
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Re: prosthetic angel
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by alecfernadez on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:09:08 PM AEST
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| I loved the title, I loved the poem, the vivid imagery, the beautiful wording, and the darkness all simply creating another masterpiece. Welldone |
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Re: prosthetic angel
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 04:35:21 PM AEST
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very dark and very creepy I loved it!
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: prosthetic angel
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Wednesday, 2nd January 2008 @ 12:47:39 PM AEST
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Voice-of-Revolution,
I think your comment was rather out of place and ridiculous. Perfection is perfection regardless of indoctrination or opinion. Perfection is personal and cannot be denied externally.
I don't think he needs to challenge who he is or his viewpoints. Perhaps you do.
I thought it was very well written. The fragments of words and sentences likened very much to the patchwork beauty described there within.
=)
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