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Black Clouds
Contributed by
XxPerfectlySanexX
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Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:23:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Black clouds of confusion fill my mind,
As the cold sharp knife begins to grind,
Memories of lies come crawling back,
The control is what I lack,
I grit my teeth as the blade repeats the same line,
Blood drips gently nows that's a good sign,
Laying down and breathing deep,
Letting the blood run as I fall asleep,
Trying to think positive and stop what's happening,
But how can I when life is just one big negative thing,
I stop and slide the blood off the blade,
Hoping soon enough the black clouds will fade,
Stinging and pricking pain I feel inside,
Now my friend are you glad you told me you lied?,
Satisfaction I feel as the emotional pain is replaced with physical,
But then I realise who's really been the great big fool.
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Re: Black Clouds
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:26:14 PM AEST
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| This is an excellent write! |
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Re: Black Clouds
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by burdened on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:33:06 PM AEST
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i know exactly how you feel.
*nods*
beautiful write.
you captured the moment. |
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Re: Black Clouds
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:04:26 PM AEST
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powerful poem, excellent expression of feelings, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Black Clouds
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by honeyrain on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:06:53 PM AEST
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Im really lovin your poems .you need to help me wit mine.yea i an relate i tried to do the same before.
Favorite linez:
Memories of lies come crawling back,
The control is what I lack,
I grit my teeth as the blade repeats the same line,
Blood drips gently nows that's a good sign,
Laying down and breathing deep,
Letting the blood run as I fall asleep,
Trying to think positive and stop what's happening,
But how can I when life is just one big negative thing,
*I would have put the whole poem as my favorite line but i couldn't |
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Re: Black Clouds
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by bite_me on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 08:32:14 PM AEST
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wow these are really good, i know jus how you feel!
Ella
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Re: Black Clouds
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by NirvanaLotus on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 07:14:01 PM AEST
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| wow very beutiful, i love the feeling you have in it. i can easily relate to this. *hugs* cutting is the crappiest addiction of all |
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