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Equus
Contributed by
TheSchroedmeister
on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 06:12:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
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No
I dont mind
That you
Call me
A jerk,
So long as it
Makes you feel better
(oh,
but i do
mind, but tell you-
i cant-
i
couldnt begin to
say why)
Disagree?
Oh, no-
Why dyou think that?
My mouth is not open,
Did my eyes betray me?
Youre right
About saying that
You transcend
All things
And rules dont
Apply to you
(what am i doing,
i know thats not true!
of course
i am lying,
im saddened
im blue
but should i
speak
my mind
i
might soon well
find that my Love
has moved on
to another)
Of course I
Am stupid,
This much I know,
How could I
Say any-
thing different
Than you?
You are so
Charming so
Pure and so
Bright,
You are the
Reason that
Breathes in me
Life
(she hurts me
so badly
but the world cannot
know that
ive never known love,
that my Love is
so cruel)
________________
It used to be this way
(i hate me)
Acting as though all is well
(i hate me)
But no deed goes unpunished,
And with solution in mind,
In her sleep I will mount her,
She will pay dearly for her crimes
Copyright ©
TheSchroedmeister
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2004-05-12 18:12:26]
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Re: Equus
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 06:30:37 PM AEST
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Re: Equus
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by bernard on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 03:30:50 AM AEST
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Your poem reminds me of the old adage, Sticks and stones may break my bones.
But names will never hurt me. Good write as my previous reader says quite a conversational piece and yes Jarred was right what an ending.
I am impressed.
bernard.
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Re: Equus
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 04:43:53 PM AEST
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I like to imagine I'm there as each poet read each poem and in your case I could almost imagine it completely. Not knowing you or anything about you, I would say you have a lot to offer. Only the truest of hearts can write with their emotions on their sleeves. You hold a certain amount of my attention with each word and I get angry and confused and then I find myself reasoning with you. This poem is amazing. Exceptional. And as a few before me have said, the ending was phenominal.
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