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smoke
Contributed by
shorty_52
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Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 09:48:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i feel your lips
against my own
is anyone watching
oh god, oh no.
i think i'm dreaming
owe that hurt
nope i'm not dreaming
but is that smoke?
oh no, the alarm just went off
we need to go
hurry up, i yell
there is just too much smoke.
it's to late.
he's to wasted to move
i stay with him
as i start to go.
would he want this
i think to myself.
i won't leave his side.
oh there went the shelf.
i hear the sirens
speed up i say
if you don't hurry up
we may not make it through the day.
before i go
i kiss him twise
pray a little
and hope he stays.
i love him so much
and so did he
we drank to much
and smoked some weed.
forgive me, i ask
as i drift away
i love you so much
and that's the last thing i say.
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Re: smoke
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 09:50:54 PM AEST
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Interesting . . . not bad by any means, but --no offense meant-- I quite preferred your other one I read.
Oh well, nice job, anyhow.
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Re: smoke
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 10:36:54 PM AEST
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It's different, I can say that for it. The one you posted after this one is much better. This one is just O.K. JMHO
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