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Empty Eyes and Empty Words
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
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Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 11:33:43 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Look at me with those empty eyes
What have I done to deserve these words from you?
You cannot love what you don't know
As I leave, I'll leave behind some tears for you
There's nothing else that I can do
I'd throw this all away before I'd lie to you
I will not lay down here and die
And never again will I believe in you
Don't try to make me happy
Don't try to make me your fool
There's nothing for me in something I cannot be
Don't try to turn me around
Don't try to make me give in
I'm not your toy and your games will not bring me down
I don't think you know me at all
'Cause what you think I want to hear, I don't
Please understand I can't be saved
It's gone too far and I hold it in my hands
This won't be over quite so soon
Your words don't mean what they used to anymore
I'm gonna walk away from this
And I don't care if you're there when I turn around
Don't ever try to change me
You can't, I won't, don't bother
There's no place for you in a heart you cannot reach to
Don't even try to tell me
How I should and should not feel
Please don't waste your precious breath on those empty words
You can tell me anything
Maybe I'll listen and maybe I'll care
But you'll never see inside
And I'm sorry to say I don't know you
The damage is done and gone
Now I just need you to realize who I am
I'm trying to figure out
If I'm better off with or without you
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2004-05-16 11:33:43]
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 12:13:17 PM AEST
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*blinks in wonder*
comenting on the poem itself, i think it's magnificent,
the flow is absolutely brilliant.
it is oh-so-very powerful...
you have managed to vent out your frustration or hurt etc. in an excellent format.
also, you have portrayed and/or revealed the true message behind this poem very directly...which impressed me because most people who try to do this end up using a LOT of redundancy which to me, isn't very pleasant to read.
overall, exceptionall write moonlit and i really DO hope that things work out for the best...Remember, if there's a possibility the wounds may heal, Time is the only thing that WILL heal them...
Best wishes,
13 year old girl deeply impressed my monlit''s magnitude of words,
katie
BTW:sorry i wrote too much. i couldn't help it. |
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by Cancer on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 01:21:41 PM AEST
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very telling and easily understood. and the flow was quite good. certain phrases like:
"Your words don't mean what they used to anymore
I'm gonna walk away from this
And I don't care if you're there when I turn around"
and
"Don't even try to tell me
How I should and should not feel
Please don't waste your precious breath on those empty words"
stood out (insert appropriate adjective of praise here). sorry, i suck at comments. anyway, i liked it enough to comment, so it must have been damn good.
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 07:27:31 PM AEST
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| Goddess . . . Dee . . . |
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by Black13 on
Monday, 24th May 2004 @ 02:32:30 PM AEST
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I missed this one.
It was brilliant.
'You cannot love what you don't know
As I leave, I'll leave behind some tears for you
There's nothing else that I can do'
'Don't try to make me happy
Don't try to make me your fool
There's nothing for me in something I cannot be
Don't try to turn me around
Don't try to make me give in'
Ok... I'm done with that.
I really did like this one.
It does kinda suck living like this towards everyone your whole life.
We don't visit here. We live here.
Sorry.... |
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 24th May 2004 @ 03:11:07 PM AEST
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perfect...
this is great dee,
like cancer said..certain lines stick out.
"As I leave, I'll leave behind some tears for you"
i really love this.
great write, phil xxx |
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by JT on
Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 08:00:21 AM AEST
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| solid write. powerfull verses. |
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Re: Empty Eyes and Empty Words
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 03:53:12 PM AEST
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Filled with a grief that seems to personal to empathize with. But does it not hurt to be so alone?
Sorry, I don't really mean to start up again.
Andrew |
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