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Simple Cycle
Contributed by
diamond_tears
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Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 06:35:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Blade...cut...bleed...
Simple cycle, endless pain.
One sharp, quick swipe,
Dripping blood falling to the floor.
Glinting silver sweeping over,
Smooth skin, laid out with silvery-purple scars.
Reminders of the past and reminders of the pain.
Blade...cut...blade...
Released, calmed, numbed body.
Like falling from the sky.
Like the soul leaving the body.
Freed from the sadness and freed from the suffering.
Blade...cut...bleed...
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2004-05-16 18:35:15]
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Re: Simple Cycle
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by diamond_tears on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 12:53:37 PM AEST
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| strong use of imagery,the pain and emotion entwined in this poem is incredible, the reader is put into the place of the character in the poem, and therefore cant help but empathise. great write, keep it up! sooze (disassociative) |
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Re: Simple Cycle
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by lanz on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 01:12:45 AM AEST
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| i like it, alot. you have captured the feelings that run through a person during that particular chaotic event almost perfectly, it is a great poem |
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Re: Simple Cycle
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by teethgrinder on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:47:44 AM AEST
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Spot on, I'm digging the way youre describing stuff and you successfully attempt to reason why this "cycle" occurrs in a way that makes the reader understand and empathise.
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