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Last Dance
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 12:28:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
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"Last Dance"
By: Danielle
I feel alone now
No one wants to stick around
Theres a million things
In life that I havent found
You are for real
You tell me to feel
I wanna get lost in you
I wanna run
I dont want to be chased
For fear I will be faced
So long
Forever is now yours
Take your finger off the trigger
You arent alone
I am now here
Express our feelings
Tell me the thing that makes you
So long
Forever this is your chance
So, pick a partner, for this is your
Last dance
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2004-05-17 00:28:53]
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Re: Last Dance
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by SweetRhythm on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:39:47 AM AEST
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MmM Danielle, that was quite deep. I enjoyed it, was different. It carries a lot of emotion & feeling behind it & that always stands for a lot.
Enjoyable read.
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Re: Last Dance
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by Soulless on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 01:37:11 PM AEST
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Wonderful piece dug from your heart, I enjoyed how well the stanzas flowed as well as the words that gracefully bound the poem together,
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: Last Dance
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:06:42 AM AEST
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"For fear I will be faced"
I didn't understand that part. Do you mean 'facing your fears', or did you cut off before saying you'd be faced with something else . . ?
Apart from this, my interest was maintained, although you may have included more in the way of allegory as to the dance.
"Take your finger off the trigger"
Whilst a powerful metaphor in itself, it doesn't really correlate to one dancing in the mood of love, or some other such idea. There are other conflicting points which, in themselves are okay, as love is rarely ever cut & dried or easily discernible . . .
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