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Retrospection
Contributed by
Hurretje
on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:15:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Black fossil
That yet beams softly
Of petrified passion
And vaporized cravings
In shrouded silence
Please, recount once again
Of your glorious triumphs
Choked in the hems of time
Of your grand feats
Covered by the counting seconds
Please, narrate once again
Of a burning love
Quenched in the emptiness that chases all
*It's ashes slips through my fingers into oblivion*
Of a silent joy
Faded in the evening sun
*It's echo does not find my ears*
Black fossil
That rests under glass
In my shrine
Polished till it shines
In all colors of the rainbow
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-05-18 03:15:25]
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Re: Retrospection
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:28:55 AM AEST
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Wow. great imagery, an ageless poem.
I wish I would write like you poems with such astonishing quality..another master piece.
..venkat |
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Re: Retrospection
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:54:25 AM AEST
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You have done it again another great write. You amaze me once again with your superb knowledge of the English language. I wish my German was half so good. Keep them coming I am a willing reader.
Grusse
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Re: Retrospection
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 05:22:58 AM AEST
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Quite interesting. One correction: I think you mean Its possessive rather than It's the contraction for it is. There is no apostrophe on the possessive its in English. Strange language, I know. I like this very much. The first stanza is my favorite, but the whole this is wonderfully written and full of colorful images.
Stitch |
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Re: Retrospection
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 02:19:16 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful, great images, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Retrospection
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by Cynthia on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 04:58:28 AM AEST
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| Hur, your writes are a fantastic. I have enjoyed all of your writes thus far. Very well done. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Retrospection
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 05:42:14 AM AEST
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| Wow. Your writing style gives me chills, it's so atmospheric, dark yet intriguing. Superb write. |
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Re: Retrospection
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by JennyFruFru on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 07:46:32 AM AEST
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| wow what an interesting and intriguing write... very unique in itself... nice job... |
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Re: Retrospection
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:42:50 PM AEST
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Enchantingly beautiful.......you have such a great command over the English language, and such beautiful pictures in my Mind's Eye.
Your poems make me sigh.
love
consue |
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Re: Retrospection
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by Archie on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:48:43 PM AEST
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| This is an awesome poem, great example of asonance and consonance |
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Re: Retrospection
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:05:10 PM AEST
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| I'm so glad I've started reading your writes. They're all so well written. Another outstanding piece. |
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