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Eight Eyes One Passion
Contributed by
Overstated
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Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 05:11:20 PM in AEST
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It trickles nearer
Eight eyes one passion
To make me cry
To wrap me around its fur
And make love to me
If she gets me, I will never be free
As it gradually moves closer
I look at its legs;
Shimmering in the sunrise
They will swathe around me soon
I wonder when this will be over
The sun is hitting noon
As it begins to snarl, its so slender
Ive been here since May
Trapped waiting for this Mistress
Im melting in decay
Tied to a chair
With only her to fear
Shes been waiting until now to jeer
Until the starvation, now she will allow
Her web spills out
Around my blue jeans
Tangling me further
Theres no way out so it seems
As she loudly lavishingly launches onto me
She touches my skin
I wriggle
Shes slender, slippery and coy
All she wanted, - was a boy
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by antares on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 05:27:18 PM AEST
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| i find this poem intriguing and very unique. i like seeing variety and u brought it. great write! |
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 05:57:15 PM AEST
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| It does not quite seem like a happy ending but it is a great poem, nice job. |
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by Jackee_line on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 06:00:33 PM AEST
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| Well done, different style. |
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by cheech on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 03:08:09 PM AEST
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hey whats up?great write i too must agree,this was a tramendisley well written poem,its very much so unique,u r a wonderful writter keep up the terrific work!!!!!!!!!
cheech
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by Aika on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 09:17:54 AM AEST
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| very special poem.. so it sounds to me.. I liked it. :-) keep writing:-)with love, aika:-) |
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by scottbuttross on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:51:48 AM AEST
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This is a very different and unique write. I love it... powerfull and mind staining imagery combined with an intriguing metaphoric comparison of nature paralleling mans pschyci.
I've posted some of my new poems, feel free to read them and let me know what you think. |
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Re: Eight Eyes One Passion
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by arden on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 06:53:44 PM AEST
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very interesting and very unique. i liked this one alot. mainly cuz it was written so differently and the it was sorta weird, but dont get me wrong its a really cool awesome weird.
this was amazing. hope i see more like this from you.
loved it.
Arden |
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