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Premonition
Contributed by
Eve
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Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 01:50:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Screaming enshrouds even the darkest of tears
Out of the deep come the malicious leers
Against the chilling reality of the black hole
Is the efflorescence of the soul
Confusion stirred into paranoia is the essence of danger
Alienation turns friend into stranger
Reaching out for a better cause
Fights against inevitably unbeatable odds
Close the window to that dark spirit of yours at last
Tonight they're calling for a bloody forecast.
Copyright ©
Eve
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2004-05-20 13:50:35]
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Re: Premonition
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by kailadragon on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 01:54:56 PM AEST
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| powerfully attracting. I love the sheer darkness and beauty of this poem. Must've been a scary dream tho. Good Write. Sweet Dreams |
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Re: Premonition
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by bleeding_chains on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 02:08:11 PM AEST
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| this is a great poem. good write. |
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Re: Premonition
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 05:14:30 PM AEST
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From the number of quality writes you have, I believe this may be up there, in my opinion, with the best of them.
A previous commentator skimmed the surface when they called it 'sheer darkness', as this elucidates the onset of despair only too well . . .
The title and overall theme are excellent, too.
Great write, overall. |
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Re: Premonition
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 06:57:52 AM AEST
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"Premonition" is indeed a befitting title, for each passing line instilled a sense of foreboding, an ominous feeling. And for some reason, I can totally picture this written with that black crayon...
Keep writing or be forced to use a yellow crayon,
-V.S. |
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