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the end of this
Contributed by
purplestary
on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 07:55:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I cannot stand to live this way
hidding you and me
I thought at last that i had you
i've never been so wrong
it's time to end this escapade
i'm tired and i want out
this isn't worth the pain you cause
so these will be my last words
the last words of you
spoken, wrote, or thought
this is where it stops
you had your fun
and i won't lie
i did enjoy it too
but now i'm ready to be loved
not just played around with
i'm ready to have someone
who will feel the same as me
I deserve more than this
and thats the end of that
I loved you once
you didn't back
you wanted entertainment
I was only an escape for you
from your micro-scopic life
i loved you once
i won't again
So these will be my last words
the last words of you
spoken, wrote, or thought
this is where it stops.
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Re: the end of this
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by holderofthestone on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 08:03:49 PM AEST
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| wow nice poem i can feel where you are coming from on this one |
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Re: the end of this
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by TheSchroedmeister on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 08:35:41 PM AEST
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| It is a liberating feeling that we all have felt or will feel before at some point in our lives. Best of luck to you, and the emotions conveyed in the poem help to stress the speaker's revelation. |
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Re: the end of this
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by JennyFruFru on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:26:05 PM AEST
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| i could right a book of comments here... i felt this way towards someone... probably the exact same situation... doesnt it stink?? people can be really cruel... but you have to realize that they do really care for you... even though you may think they dont... its hard i know... but they wouldnt keep you a part of their life for so long if they didnt really care... stay strong :) :) :) |
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Re: the end of this
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by alecfernadez on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 03:23:13 AM AEST
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| well done, this poem really really was amazing, and sort of like a semi-bible for the way all relationships go today. Great format of the poem, starting out with depressing pessamism, and hurtiling angry optomism towards the end. Brilliant |
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Re: the end of this
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 02:22:39 AM AEST
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| I know I already posted on this, but I find myself re-reading this frequently. This is a very strong poem. I like the way you tell it and express the feelings. you have a very creative style I enjoy reading your work. |
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Re: the end of this
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 10:21:54 AM AEST
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| Shutting down... because you have to --- I understand this well. Oh... it can hurt like hell but sometimes it's the only thing you can do. Very well expressed and achingly relatable. Well done! |
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