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Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
Contributed by
alecfernadez
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Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 04:24:45 PM in AEST
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Her dress was laced with chloroform
Her lipstick contained cyanide
My folks complained she was trouble
Like a fool I never listened
I was lost behind her blue eyes
For her, I was ready to die
Counting the flies on the ceiling
Just bored and tired of living
She was the first to say the words
Ill die if you will die with me
Leave this sad world filled with sorrow
End it so theres no tomorrow
Here we are hands clasped together
Waiting for our blood to run dry
From these slashes right through our wrists
We may have still loved together
But now we can die together
Counting the flies on the ceiling
As this world fades far from our sight
Now the sheets burn red from our blood
One last embrace from this faade
From a life supposedly great
Our lips touch for the last evening
As we both fade away from life
We look into each others eyes
And say goodnight
Copyright ©
alecfernadez
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2004-05-22 16:24:45]
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 04:53:39 PM AEST
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Dark write, but so well written..
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:17:37 PM AEST
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| wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow!!!!!!! wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow!!! did i say wow yet??!!! amazing write!! it's like a gothic sorta love....wow wow wow...i haven't felt like that about a poem for a long time. you have great talent! |
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:33:08 PM AEST
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Laudable write, alec. It says a lot, and is worked out with skill, using some nice rhyming touches.
Thanks for sharing it. |
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:38:44 PM AEST
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You really do have a talent, for this poem is a beautiful one. I especially love the first stanza and its imagery... its so... unique. You'll go far if you have that much creativity upstairs. Bravo and encore!!!!!!!!!!!
Love,
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by TwEeK on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 03:42:52 PM AEST
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so beautiful, well written
wouldnt it would be nice just to find some one to end your life with, then then the journey wouldnt seem as frightning
great write, keep on truck'n
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Re: Eulogy of a Dead Twosome
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by arden on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 09:54:02 AM AEST
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damn alec..... wow lol
so dark and awesome. it read so well. im at a loss for words cuz im like so impressed lol
i loved this as i love all your dark and twisted writes. youve got alot of talent. keep it up.
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