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Shattered Into You
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 11:15:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She had stopped singing by then
The candles no longer burned, when
We started shifting, changing
Silently feelings were rearranging
I did not see it - I was blind
I couldnt see past this heart of mine
Dreaming wide open, wishing long
Hearing still the absent song
I tried so hard to let it go
Fearing that I would hurt you so
So I drank you away a time or two
But still wound up next to you
I was falling into deep expanse
Wanting then to take the chance
Turning around, ready to leap
Lost in dreams whilst you sleep
She had stopped singing by then
The candles no longer burned, when
The words began to twist around
Our separate answers were found
You didnt see - you were blind
Hanging on those words of mine
You thought that concern was feigned
That lies and secrets had reigned
You soon began to let it go
Thinking that I would want it so
For you then a resolution came
No more would it be the same
Moving yourself away from me
Letting go of the possibility
You finally gave up on me, and
Sadly you let go my hand
She had stopped singing by then,
The candles no longer burned, when
You said that we were through
And I shattered into you.
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Silent-No-More
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2004-05-22 23:15:42]
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:45:52 AM AEST
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excellent title, exquisite poem, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by Chrissylee on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:49:25 AM AEST
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| nice write and i know how it feels to be the one that is shattered by the one you hold close to your heart.. but i still love him and always will |
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by AnGeL_M on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:50:51 AM AEST
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Great Write Loved It !!!!!! Keep Em Coming :-)
Hugs , Love & God Bless
LoVe - AnGeL |
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:07:31 AM AEST
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Another beautiful, rhythmic expression, SNM.
I like it. Lots. |
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 24th May 2004 @ 04:40:36 AM AEST
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| Oh, such poetry expressed so beautifuly ... I related so well to these words ... perfect last verse ... Jan |
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by kori31 on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 10:52:08 PM AEST
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| absolutely great! ....i can relate 1000%..........i just started reading your stuff.......i look forward to more......great write |
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 01:18:16 AM AEST
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Brilliant. Its deep, powerful and heart-wrenchingly moving., "Shattered into you" is such a beautiful phrase...
Take Care
-Becca
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Re: Shattered Into You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 02:27:49 PM AEST
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Such a brilliantly written poem, Snem. You take the reader through a facet of your life with wonderful metaphors and imagery.
I am highly impressed.
I love every line of this poem but I must say, my favortie line is "And I – shattered into you" and my favorite phrase is "Dreaming wide open". I think I can really relate to that dreaming wide open.
Thank you very much for sharing this.
Timber
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