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The unseen one
Contributed by
heartfilledblood
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Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 05:12:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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All who live the day
Know of the unseen one
He prowls the days
He prowls the night
In search of a new one
To pray upon
Unable too see
Unable too punch
He strips your life
With one swift slash
With a straight head
And a spirit of gold
You can overcome
The unseen one
For he makes you think
That there's nothing in life
But for there for all
For we wont fall
We were ment too persue
Not too fall
For too take the easy way out
Is what he wants
Its not death
For many do think
But yourself as one
For you have two sides
Not the one of hope
The one of no life
The one of no hope
The one I call
The unseen one
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heartfilledblood
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2004-05-25 17:12:54]
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Re: The unseen one
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 05:21:17 PM AEST
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| This is a good poem, the line "But for there for all" makes no sense to me. Can you explain it so that I can understand your poem better? |
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Re: The unseen one
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 01:24:27 AM AEST
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Excellent piece! You seem to be a fellow warrior of the light. I like this one.
A few spelling errors, though. 'too' should be 'to' in the places it appears here. 'too' is only used for 'also' and in comparing ("too much"). But well done anyway. I'm just a fanatic when it comes to spelling. Keep up the good work!
Andrew |
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