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The beautiful mountain valley.....
Contributed by
ravisada
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Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 03:18:04 AM in AEST
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The mountain valley is the place of nature's gift
Through out the season it shower with beautiful nature
When you stand in between the mountain valley
You feel that the heaven blesses you dearly
You feel that the greenery hug you tightly
You feel that the cool breeze touches you tenderly
You see that the water falls roll over violently
You see that the trees dance to the tune of wind smoothly
You hear that the birds sing nature choir happily
You watch that the animals walk freely
When the nature open its heart widely
It gives everyone a chance to be with nature closely.
Ravi Sathasivam / Sri Lanka
Copyright 2004 Ravi Sathasivam
Copyright ©
ravisada
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2004-05-27 03:18:04]
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Re: The beautiful mountain valley.....
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by Vermillion on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 05:53:54 AM AEST
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i was raised in a very moutainess area and when i read your poems its like i can close my eyes and im a child again hiking on a automs morning.
your an excellent writer please keep up the good work.
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Re: The beautiful mountain valley.....
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by mountainhigh on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:47:40 AM AEST
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The sweet scent of pine, the crispness of the air, the mist of the clouds in the morning, and the glow of the moon at night, so close you could reach out and touch. Such is the way I feel when reading this, and seeing my mountain.
Thank you for letting me travel again.
Chris |
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Re: The beautiful mountain valley.....
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by Cole on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 08:21:49 PM AEST
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It's a beautiful image, but I feel that you could have presented it in a better way. Adverbs were overused, and you should have adressed how this nature emotionaly effected you. Not a bad poem, though.
-Cole-
P.S. - If you could read and review one of my poems in return, it'd be much appreciated. |
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