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Someday
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 05:26:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Someday Ill leave and Ill scarcely look back
Ill get on a train that goes down the right track
Ill go and Ill make a good name for myself
Ill no longer watch from a dusty old shelf
Ill get to move on and Ill get to be free
Ill never remember the things that Ill flee
Ill run from this place, the restraints and the Nos
Ill get to love life again, feel how it flows
Ill be very happy with well-deserved freedom
Ill have fewer worriesthats great! I dont need em!
Someday when Im able, Ill get out of here
And Ill learn to teach music that pleases my ear
And once I make money, enough I will pay
And Ill own a brick building to house my caf
And Ill have open mic night with plenty of talent
And Ill be an owner so fun and so gallant
And someone will hear me one night when I sing
And theyll make me a deal and up for it Ill spring
And then Ill make money for singing my song
And wont evryone think on how they were wrong?
Someday from this place I will simply desert
I wont ever go back, no Ill never revert
I wont be this lonely forgotten misfit
I wont have to long for a fire to be lit
I wont be alone every Friday date night
I wont wonder if Ill receive an invite
I wont be alone and I wont be outcast
I wont have to feel the harsh pains of my past
I wont be the one who just watches the fun
Someday I'll be someone known now by no one.
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2004-05-27 17:26:02]
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Re: Someday
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by Juliet on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 05:49:47 PM AEST
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| I really like this. It has a lot of thought in it. I love how almost every line in the first stanza begins with "I'll", and second one is "And", and the thrid is "I". It kept the beat. The only time a line doesn't begin with those words is when it says "Someday." Good! |
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Re: Someday
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by Archie on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 06:08:30 PM AEST
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| Two things come to mind when I read this poem, the first is a country song called "My next 50 years, the second is my own childhood and how close I am to achieving my dreams. I really do hope the best for me, when you have your kareoke party I will come over and sing for you. That's a promise! |
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Re: Someday
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:46:04 PM AEST
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That's the spirit! Your deepest dream is the path laid out for you. It is up to you to take it. A blessing upon your journey!
Andrew |
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Re: Someday
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by full_blur on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:51:00 PM AEST
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| wow. I feel like this sometimes, you describe the dreams of the lonely in a breathtaking manner! |
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Re: Someday
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by eatfresh22 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:41:49 PM AEST
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That was so refreshing. I admire your ambition. Not enough people in the world have dreams today, but I'm glad that you do. I'm excited for you now, to be able to fulfill all of the things you want to do. Such talent you have in making your dreams a poem. Good luck!
~Carrie~ |
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