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I May Dream
Contributed by
LittleWillow
on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 08:42:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I may dream of moonlit skies
tall lilies and dragonflies
and seeing life through pure diamond eyes
but I'll always come back to you
I may dream of millions of dollars
swimming through it hours after hours
and building a castle with twenty-eight towers
but I'll always come back to you
I may dream of more romance
in case you don't satisfy me, by chance
but I've always loved the way you dance
so I'll always come back to you
I may dream of sugar and honey
and decide I need a man with more money
but my decisions are wispy, in that way I'm funny
so I'll always come back to you
I may dream of a mansion tall
with a guitar-shaped pool, and sheet music walls
but I will realize that some dreams must fall
and I'll always come back to you
I may dream of virtuosity
your musician's hands quiver when you sing to me
and I'll realize you can't help it if you can't sing in key
so I'll always come back to you
though I may dream from time to time
it won't disturb the rhythm and rhyme
of loving you in this magnificent sublime
and I'll always come back to you
Copyright ©
LittleWillow
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2004-05-27 20:42:46]
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Re: I May Dream
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by Luinil on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 08:47:32 PM AEST
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| i love the flow of your poem... great job! |
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Re: I May Dream
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by holderofthestone on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 08:49:36 PM AEST
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| great poem. I cant wait to read more of your work. keep em coming! |
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Re: I May Dream
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by bttrflynajar on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 09:03:16 PM AEST
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| wow this was definantly a piece of true art work! ever thought of publishing? how long did this take you? |
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Re: I May Dream
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by mountainhigh on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 09:36:08 PM AEST
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| This is a sweet dream, I could read over and over. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: I May Dream
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 05:15:17 AM AEST
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I rather enjoyed this poem. The title drew me in, and the theme kept me intrigued all the way through. Rhyme was solid, and I like how you used repetition to good effect (by ending each stanza with "i'll always come back to you").
My only minor gripe is the lack of line breaks, which slightly disrupts the overall flow. Nevertheless, this is a very solid offering, a thoroughly enjoyable read.
Vanished in fog without a trace,
-V.S. |
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