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Zoma
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 03:59:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I dreamed a dream when I was eight
At the movies, it was late
I got my ticket for the movie
The theater was awfly groovy
I sat downthe second row
The silver screen had an eerie glow
There were no previews, just a jolt
Across the screen-- a lightning bolt
It looked like some strange arcade game
A creepy oneZoma the name
A room full of reflecting glass
And mats on the floorjust like gym class
Just then a door bursts open wide
A praying mantis comes inside
Hes big and green and slimy too
Im scared! I dont know what to do!
And soon there were a hundred more
I couldnt flee, they blocked the door
But OH!the matted floor broke up
From one to the next I could leap and jump
I jumped right through a trap-door ceiling
Had I been a car, my tires were peeling
I ran for life away from there
But one green mantis caught my hair
I screamed so loud it could not hear
My weapon was so quickly clear
I yelled a lot and ran real fast
Hoping this would cease to last
Through purple doors I dashed away
Into a bedroom, where Id stay
I was quite glad Id been so deft
When I calmed down, nothing was left
Remaining sleep without a dream
But I woke in a sweaty steam
I cant forget that crazy scene
That sucked me in the movie screen
Copyright ©
liquidsunshine
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2004-05-31 15:59:40]
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Re: Zoma
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by Stitch on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 04:13:31 PM AEST
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I've got to say,
that's quite a dream
If it were mine,
I'm sure I'd scream
From ugly bugs
I'd rather run
I don't like bugs
They are no fun!
Stitch |
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Re: Zoma
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by emystar on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 04:22:02 PM AEST
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Well u certainly painted a good picture of your nitemare.
good job.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Zoma
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by Archie on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 04:26:23 PM AEST
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| This is a good poem and funny too wow I could think of some movie titles that remind me of this dream. |
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Re: Zoma
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 07:14:10 PM AEST
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Your imagery was great. The theme was intriguing. I always feel this way when I go to an IMAX production. It draws me deep into the subject. Gret write.
Rita |
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Re: Zoma
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 07:15:06 PM AEST
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well written good flow followed the ride
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Re: Zoma
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by eatfresh22 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:50:11 PM AEST
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Great rhythym to this poem. Such a fun, easy one to read, it just flowed right off the screen. I enjoyed it. Dreams can be rather scary. Very cute!
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Zoma
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by TheVoice on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 09:47:01 PM AEST
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WOW!! Late night eats before bed.....lol
Great write, enjoyed very much.
The Voice
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Re: Zoma
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:57:57 AM AEST
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Oh my! Not exactly fun. I must say, however, I've never known the terror of being pursued by bugs... and I live on a farm...
Nice job!
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Re: Zoma
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 12:54:44 AM AEST
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very creative:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Zoma
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by OhSaige on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 04:42:51 PM AEST
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| I love the imagery Excellant write |
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